Week 1: The Criminal by Danny

Once I was in jail because I killed the president of America. I killed him because I thought he was a pain and that’s why I’m here but I’ve been trying to get out for about 10 years. Sadly every time I try to get out I get caught.

My friend said one day,”so, what lies ahead of you? maybe execution …” but by the time he finished I had nearly dug another hole. One hour later I was finished and we both got out.

Well that’s what we thought but then we looked back and we saw a guard and he shot at both of us.

10 thoughts on “Week 1: The Criminal by Danny”

  1. Ah Danny. I can’t tell you how much your story made me laugh. I’m not sure if that was your intention, but I’m sure there are a lot of people who would smile if they read your story too. I like how you describe your escape – but I was disappointed to learn your attempt was futile.

  2. Wow! Great story Danny! It reminded me of an old film called the Shawshank Redemption, about a prisoner who escapes. Unfortunately you weren’t so lucky in your story.
    Great use of the prompt.
    Ms Brennock
    Team 100 w/c

  3. I love your story because you mentioned where you were,how you got to jail and why.I hope you write more interesting stories like this Danny.

    From Fortune in Mr.Russell’s class

  4. I like when he killed the president and how he was trying to get out for ten years and it never
    Great story hope you make good ones like this
    By Collins

  5. What a great photo of Mrs Boyce’s Class!

    Great piece of writing, Danny! Have you heard the story of THE WOODEN HORSE? Perhaps you could use that to escape! Try and add some adjectives to make your writing even more interesting!

    Best wishes

    Mr Hales #Team100WC

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