Week 1 Horse Racing by Laurynas

” And only 5 minutes left to place your bet,” the loudspeaker said.

I came to the desk to place my bet but which one would I choose? Maybe Runner, no, Slow Coach, in my dreams. But as I  saw Lightning I knew he was mine.

The man asked, ” Now which one?”

“Lightning ” I repeated.

“And how much? ” he asked again.

“Just to try my luck, 1 million “I replied handing in the money.

” Ok here is the ticket, “he said.

I took the ticket and went in. The race started and I thought well what a start. I could see Lightning in the lead. With only one turn left he crossed the finish line first.

” Yesss, Three Million here I come!”

4 thoughts on “Week 1 Horse Racing by Laurynas”

  1. Your story captured my interest right at the opening Laurynas; a quote is a really powerful way to open a story. Your reader’s imagination is instantly fired – who’s saying that, where are they and what’s happening? I instantly wanted to know what’s going on. The rest of the story’s good too 😉 and you crafted the dialogue well, avoiding the ‘he said … then she said…’ trap.
    Well done and keep rising to the Challenge.

  2. Well done great start to the 100 word challenge. You’ve done a great job. I’ll be looking forward to your stories every week.
    Keep up the great work.

  3. This is a fabulous 100 wc. As far as I know it’s your first one? I’m very impressed by how you used the prompt, but even more impressed by the fabulous names you gave the horses. Well done! Great imagination.

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