Week 1 : Sam’s Dream by Maciej

Once upon a time, there was a child called Sam. Sam was going to school. He was very excited because it was his first day at school. When he got to school he noticed that there was a new boy; his name was Tom. When it was break time he went to play football. When he was about to score a goal Tom pushed Sam into a hole. He gave Sam a torch and a sandwich to eat.

So what lies ahead of me in this dark tunnel? he thought.

 

7 thoughts on “Week 1 : Sam’s Dream by Maciej”

  1. Great story Maciej! I really enjoyed the story and was surprised to find out that Tom would push Sam into the hole-great plot twist. I also loved the range of grammatical techniques you used and the fact that you managed to include a semi colon-very impressive. I also liked the fact that you ended on the hint to create a cliff hanger for the reader; I can’t wait to find out what happened in the tunnel. Keep up the great work!

  2. Hi Maciej… I thought this was going to be a lovely story about two boys who became friends. How wrong was I?? This Tom doesn’t sound like a nice guy at all. Why would he push Sam into a hole. He must’ve expected Sam to be a long time down there if he gave him supplies.

  3. I like your story because you introduce the person in the story.I hope you write more.

    From Fortune in Mr.Russell’s class 17/18

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