Week 11 The statue by Conor

One day I went to the park. I wanted to climb the trees. When I reached the trees I saw a statue of a man with black clothes on. He looked very aggressive. I thought it was some kind of shenanigan.I felt a bit bamboozled because I never saw it there before.

After I finished at the trees it was time to go home. On the way home I heard pandemonium. I told mom to turn the car around. When we got back the place was a big mess. Then I saw the man murdering people.

7 thoughts on “Week 11 The statue by Conor”

  1. Hi Conor – I really enjoyed reading your story! You used some really great vocabulary in your writing – that made it easy to read, and really interesting too. I must admit, I’m a little terrified of this mysterious man and I want to know more, but then, I might be even more frightened if I learned more about him! Keep up the awesome writing!

  2. Well done on your writing Conor.
    It isn’t easy to write a story with only 100 words but you managed very well.
    I really like how you describe what is happening in the picture. You grabbed my attention from the start with very descriptive words like shenanigans, pandemonium and bamboozled.
    Your writing is very well organised and you’ve taken great care with spellings and grammar.
    Looking forward to reading your writing in the future.
    Keep up the good work !

    Shane, Teacher
    Dublin, Ireland
    (Team 100)

  3. Hi Conor,
    What a shocking end to your writing, you had made the man appear suspicious but I really wasn’t expecting that to happen!
    I was very impressed with your word choices this week, did you make a conscious effort to try to use new vocabulary?
    Miss T
    Stockbridge, Hampshire

  4. I really liked this work of writing because I liked the bit where you found out the man was murdring other people.

    Luca

  5. Some great words in this story. I especially like shenanigan, bamboozle and pandemonium. Keep up the great writing.

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