Week 11 The thought of dying by Aidan

One night I was in my bed and I couldn’t get a thought out of my head. It wasn’t a good one – it was an extremely bad one – it was the thought of dying.

It was so sad just thinking of me slowly passing away. I tried to think of something happy but then I thought of the most wonderful thing you could think of. My family. Mother is so nice and my father always goes fishing with me.

Then BAM- I ended up in the middle of the forest and a hooded figure started walking towards me.  He was holding a reaper and then he slowly said “it’s time”

“No I am too young. I have to see my family again. No no nooo!…

6 thoughts on “Week 11 The thought of dying by Aidan”

  1. Hi Aiden I think you did a wonderful job on your writing. I really liked that time you said Bam and went on. But no two sentences start with the same word in the being of the sentense. Oh and I love that transition you did at the end ” no I am to young I have to see my family again”. And also this is good because you stuff is on point.

  2. Hi Aidan, your writing was amazing I like all the big action words like BAM. Your story sounds really real like it could happen in real life. Your story is like a book that I have read It was a book I read a long time ago so I can’t really tell you the name of it. N ext time you should say why you ended up in the forest because I could be any way you ended up there.
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  3. Well done Aidan, you’ve written a great story this week. It was a bit scary and a bit sad. I really hope it was all a dream. I really like how you wrote ‘Bam’, it shocks the reader into the next part of your story!
    Great writing.
    Ms Brennock
    Team 100 w/c

  4. You’ve written a powerful piece this week Aidan – well done!
    I’m just hoping that it’s all part of a nightmare and that you will wake up soon.
    Super work!

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