Beep, Beep.
I picked up my phone. It was an unnamed user, probably my agency calling me for a new mission. “There has been a robbery at the Diamond Jewelery shop. The thief is heading your way. Catch him. ” Then the call ended.
I turned the key in my car and moved out of the underground carpark. Just as I was leaving, a masked ” thing” walked up to the car. ” Which way to the shops?” it panted. I pointed towards the elevator and it ran towards them.
I knew exactly who this was, it was the thief.
Hi Dan! I love how you hooked your readers with “I picked up my phone. It was an unnamed user”. I also thought the suspense was awesome when you said the thief was coming your way because I started to get nervous about what would happen. I like that you also said you were part of a secret agency. I like to make some stories about secret agents and cool stuff like that to! I think your story is really good!