A few fishermen set out at noon to catch some fish.They got a radio call from an unknown person saying, “There is a ship with lots of treasure inside.”
They sent a map of where the treasure would be. They went to check it out and found nothing. Just then the wind got worse and the rain started pouring on us. A big whirlpool opened and the sailors fell in. They were in shock when they arrived.
“Where are we?” a fisherman asked?
We explored the inside and found so much treasure.
“WE ARE RICH!” we exclaimed.
Then we saw a big sign saying, The Lost City Of Atlantis.
How are we getting home?
Great writing Dylan. They ended up with a bit of a conundrum, lots of treasure but no way home! I wonder what you would do in that situation. Not an easy choice.
Keep up the great work.
Ms Brennock
Hi Dylan
I really liked your story this week
Star-Great adjectives and great punctuation.
Star- I also like the way you used speech and good plot
I also like your story because it was different and creative
here’s my link you can comment on it if you like
http://smppspower.weebly.com/100-wc-week-19/ellen-p#comments
-Ellen P
I enjoyed your story this week Dylan – Well done!
I hope you find a way to get back. Otherwise all that treasure will be worthless.
Good work this week.
Hi Dylan. Outstanding story this week. It was very enjoyable reading it.
*** Excellent paragraphing.
Wish: There is no question mark after: a fishermen asked.
***Very creative.
If you get a chance could you please look at my story and tell me what you think at: http://smppspower.weebly.com/100-wc-week-19/rebecca
Keep up the BRILLIANT work!
-Rebecca.
Maybe that’s the price of finding the treasure Dylan – that you are trapped with it forever! I love reading about the lost city of Atlantis. History and myths are always great inspiration for stories! Keep up the super writing Dylan!