One sunny day Barry and I wanted some sweets.
“Let’s go to Super Sweets ” Barry said.
“They do amazing sweets ” Barry explained.
We walked in and stumbled upon a big poster on the wall.
There was a nice looking sweet on it.
“I’ll have that one, “I said pointing at the poster,” same,” said Barry.
The shopkeeper handed us our bags.
“These sweets smell good,” said Barry.
“They look nice too,” I said.
Soon I opened my bag and POOF!! …I shrunk.
Well, how did this happen?
hi dan great story I loved the name super sweets bye from adam
hi Dan great story the best part was when they shrunk bye from Adam
great story Dan I love the sweet shop’s name bye from Adam.
Hi Dan I love the part where they shrink. FROM DYLAN
Now this post is an excellent advert for not eating sweets Dan! Dentists would love it!!
Hi Dan
Super Sweets sounds like the best sweet shop, although I’m a bit unsure about the bag of sweets that you have chosen! I’d love to know what happens next, you could have lots of adventures in your shrunken state.
Miss T
Stockbridge school
I like the way you and Barry shrunk in the story, I hope you do more.
From Fortune in Mr.Russell’s class
Hi Dan. Great story it was very funny.Keep up the good WORK!!!
FROM TOM
I love this story Dan! Well done!
I suppose they are called Super Sweets for a reason.
I like your use of onomatopoeia – Poof!
Great work this week.
Hi Dan loved you story the best was when they shrunk ?
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-Josh
So funny dan ????? I loved the part where he shrunk
By Caoilan mrrussels 5th class
Hi Dan great story I like how the kids shrunk at the end