Week 2: The Zoo By Marc

I was going on a tour to the zoo with my teacher. She did NOT like alligators. It was a V.I.P. trip so we got to go in the cages and feed the animals. We climbed the fence to feed the tiger but there was a gate there. It was tricky to get the slimy fresh meat over the fence. The tigers’ cage was full of dense pine trees.

After that, we went to the scaly green alligator cage. My teacher went mauve. The alligator was as quick as a bullet from a gun. Suddenly the cage broke.

What were we going to do?

4 thoughts on “Week 2: The Zoo By Marc”

  1. Hi Marc. Ending your story with a cliffhanger was a great idea, because the reader can think about all the different ways the story can end. Did you know there are many accidents that have been caused by alligators! When I go to the zoo I always love going to see the alligators, it can be so interesting. Would you ever want to go on a V.I.P trip to the zoo, and why? One tip I have is maybe you could bold the words you have to use. -Sienna in Illinois

  2. Hi Marc,
    I hope you and your class ran for you life when the alligator broke the cage. Great story and I hope you write more.

    From Fortune in Mr.Russell’s class (last year)

  3. Hi Marc. I’m not so sure I’d like a V.I.P. trip to the Zoo. Sounds like a dangerous excursion to me. It’s a good idea to end your story on a ‘cliffhanger’ as it leaves room for a follow up to the story.

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