Week 20: Escaping By Liam

The time had come, I had waited a long time for this day. An immense amount of planning went into it. As the guard turned away, I started to pull the bricks from the wall. I had prepared beforehand, so it was easy.I did it! I was able to escape from my cell. I needed to work fast if I wanted to get away.

Before I knew it, the alarm was sounded and all the guards were alerted to my escape. The noise was so loud! It was ear piercing, eardrum popping loud.

I kept going. I had to swim to mainland. After that, I just had to stay unnoticed. ….

Suddenly, a bright light shone down on me.

28 thoughts on “Week 20: Escaping By Liam”

  1. First off I want to say wonderful blog! I had a quick question that I’d like to ask if you don’t mind. I was interested to find out how you center yourself and clear your head before writing. I’ve had trouble clearing my mind in getting my thoughts out there. I truly do take pleasure in writing however it just seems like the first 10 to 15 minutes are generally lost just trying to figure out how to begin. Any suggestions or hints? Thank you!

  2. Generally I don’t read article on blogs, but I would like to say that this write-up very pressured me to take a look at and do it! Your writing taste has been surprised me. Thank you, quite great post.|

  3. Hi Liam
    Brilliant story!
    This was quite intense!
    Did you get caught by the gaurds?
    Well done on showcase and I look forward to reading more stories like this!
    By Calum

  4. Hi Liam.
    Great story.
    I wrote a story very similar to this.
    Again great use of the sounding words.
    This story was well deserving of a showcase.
    By Bryan

  5. Hey liam good story.
    Well done for getting a showcase.
    I liked the way you left the story on a massive cliffhanger!
    What happened after the light shone down on you?
    This story reminded me of a film called escape from alcatraz.
    Gary 6th.

  6. Hi Liam, I wonder what happened after the light shone on you.
    I hope the guards did not catch you.
    Congratulations on being showcased.
    Keep up the good work.
    Shane C 5th

  7. Hi Liam your story was excellent. Congratulations on getting showcase. I feel sorry for you that you got caught. I liked how you started your story by explaining how much effort and time you put into escaping. You used the prompt really well. Great work Kallum.

  8. Great story Liam well deserved showcase
    Your story reminded of a game I played you like asaping from prison so you would be better then me

  9. Well done Liam
    I really liked your story this week it was really good .
    I dont think it is so james bond when easy escaping but i have to when there vegetables involved.
    This reminds me of james bond when he ascapes fromprison.
    please commment on my story it is called doll house.
    when there wasa light what happened
    Your sincerely julius

  10. Hi aLiam
    That was a really good story
    I liked the way you made your story into a prison-break
    It reminded me of a film called Escape( you should see it)
    It got me wondering were you cought???
    Congratulations on getting picked for a showcase
    Laurynas, Mrs Boyce class.

  11. Hi Liam amazing story I loved reading it
    I wonder did you get caught ?
    This reminded me of the escape from Alcatraz
    I loved how you used the prompt!
    How long did it take you to make the hole in the wall?
    Did you take anyone with you?
    Great Story congratulations on showcase bye Shane F

  12. Hi Liam that was a fantastic story.
    Congratulations on getting showcased.
    That was good that you escaped from the prison at first.
    Did you get spotted?
    Will you right a part two?
    Great story.
    David 5th.

  13. Great story Liam, well done. You’ve used some great vocabulary and you describe the scene very well. Your story reminds me of the film ‘The Shawshank Redemption.’
    I really like your closing sentence, it has a sense of impending doom about it.
    Great work, well done.

  14. Thrilling story Liam. We would love to know what happens next. We all enjoyed reading it here in St.Molua’s NS Ardagh. Keep up the good work.

  15. Hey Liam.
    What a terrific story you wrote this week.
    I wonder what you had done for going into prison?
    It is bad luck that you got caught.
    Mrs Boyces Class

  16. Hi Liam
    I really liked your story that you created this week, as I was reading it I was trying to pre-empt how you might use the prompt and I just couldn’t! You obviously had a really clear picture in your head when you wrote this.
    Miss T

  17. Hi Liam
    i really enjoyed your story here are a few things i have to say
    star; brilliant adjectives
    star no.2; brilliant theme towards the prompt
    star no.3 ; great improvment each week
    question; at the end do you die
    wish; no wish
    link; recently my brother has been obsessed prison and criminal programs and talks about alot so your story reminded of that
    i would love if you could look at my story at
    kind regards,
    sophie f.

  18. Wow Liam, what a thrilling story! I think that you used the prompt in a very unusual and interesting way. I hope you didn’t get caught. Well done, great work!

  19. Hi Liam.
    What a terrific story. I love escape themed ones. If you write it right, it’s amazing, and that’s what you did.
    The cliffhanger at the end was very effective. You left me wondering whether you got caught or not?
    Well done again Liam.

  20. Hi Liam I cant believe how strong you are getting on with your storys.

    Star, great use of adjectives.
    Star, great speech marks and punctuation.
    Star, loved the way you used open sentences.
    Wish: instead of saying the arlarm was sounded you could of said tge alarm went off.

    But overall you did a fantastic job and hopefully yiu will have a chance to win so goodluck.

  21. Oh no Liam – I was hoping you had gotten away unnoticed!
    I’m wondering what you had done to be in prison in the first place?
    Great Work – well done!

  22. Hi Liam
    We really liked your story it was really enjoyable.
    To make it better you could change the first sentence to , The time had come, I have waited for a long time for this day to come.
    But other than that, it is great.
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  23. I really enjoyed reading your story, Liam
    I really liked how you left us with a cliffhanger, hopefully it wasn’t the prison guards but I’m guessing it was 🙂
    Great use of adjectives and punctuation as well
    Great story this week
    Good Luck!

    – Dearbhla

    Also, if you get the time could you comment on my story as well? 🙂
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  24. Uh-oh… it sounds like you might have been caught Liam! I was rooting for you, hoping that you’d make it. Maybe it wasn’t the prison guards? Really enjoyed this story, keep up the great work!

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