Week 21 Men Looking Like Trees By Danny

One fine sunny afternoon my family and I were in the park when suddenly we all saw men looking like trees in yoga poses. They were all in different poses. After looking at them for a few minutes my brother and I went on the swings, the slide, the roundabout and the climbing frame. After that, we got an ice cream, went home and watched television for a while.

Just then my mother noticed that she had forgotten her hat at the park so my father and I went to get it. When we got there I noticed the tree people doing yoga were gone. I was really scared.

7 thoughts on “Week 21 Men Looking Like Trees By Danny”

  1. Well done Danny you’ve done a great job this week. Your opening is very bright and happy and you describe a lovely day out. Then at the end of your story there is an ominous, scary feel to it. You manage to make your reader feel scared. I think your short sentences help with this.
    Great writing well done.
    Ms Brennock
    Team 100 w/c
    Dublin

  2. I liked the contrast in your story this week, Danny. From enjoying the park to ending with you being worried by the people that you hadn’t been so concerned about before.
    Miss T
    Stockbridge, Hampshire

  3. Well done Danny.
    It sounds like you felt threatened by these men doing yoga poses. I wonder why?
    It would be interesting to develop this story more. Why were they there in the first place? Was it just for relaxation? Or was there something more sinister going on? Were they planning a mission?
    Good work.

  4. Hi Danny, You’ve described what sounds like a fabulous family day out. Great idea that the picture looks like trees doing yoga! I wonder did these yoga fanatics take your mum’s hat?

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