Walking to school with my friend Dara was no fun. All he did was walk slowly. He did not do anything else except for when a pheasant flew past. I was told that the school bully Johnny Brown was having a rendezvous in the yard that day. I was not looking forward to what might happen after that.
The teacher read us a book about how things fly. I could not get that out of my head. So when I got home I went straight to the garage and got the big brown ladder. After that, I snatched the goldfish bowl, some wax and some feathers.
Slowly I climbed up the brown ladder on to the roof. I made wings for my fish and threw him off the roof…
Hello Ronan, your story is full of lots of interesting detail. I like the way you give us some insight into how you felt about the bully. Your final sentence comes as a surprise and I think it is good how you leave the reader in suspense, not knowing what really happened. I think maybe the goldfish was able to fly away. That would be really cool wouldn’t it?
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I really enjoyed your story this week Ronan – well done!
I’m afraid to ask …but I wonder how did your goldfish get on?
I liked allot the ending part when you sudenly
wen you made wings to your fish and it would be better if you put at the end
a cliffhanger and the its wen people say BUT WAT HAPEND NEXT but your work is very good
Ive like it…………………………
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