Week 23 : Home Alone by Maciej

Bang !
I heard the door. OH no, I am going to be late so I quickly GOT out of bed, brushed my teeth and got dressed up and ran out. But It was too late. My family went on holidays WITHOUT ME.

But what I was in charge? Now I could do anything. I quickly rushed upstairs to play. When my family came home they were surprised to see the big mess.

3 thoughts on “Week 23 : Home Alone by Maciej”

  1. Hi Maciej! I liked your writing. one thing that you did well is that you made very good in the begining is that you said “I heard the door bang. oh no”. One thing that you could work on is trying to ad more on to your middle because i felt that it was short.

  2. I like that you started with action. It drew me in. Did you need some inverted commas? I’m not sure.
    Mr. M. (Team 100WC)
    Bedfordshire, UK

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