Week 23 : The Evil Babysitter by Dylan

“But I don’t want Bob to babysit me ” I said to my parents.
Let me introduce myself my name is Jeffy and I am 10 years old.
Bob the babysitter is about to babysit me .
All my friends have had Bob before and said he’s horrible.

Suddenly I heard a knock at the door and Bob came in .
“Hello Jeffy,” said Bob evilly.
As soon as my parents left Bob sent me to my room.

But what if I was in charge ? I thought cunningly.
I grabbed my pet tarantula and put it in Bob’s bowl .
I grinned evilly…

3 thoughts on “Week 23 : The Evil Babysitter by Dylan”

  1. Hi Dylan
    This is a very nice short story you did great on periods and capitalization the part were he is evil can happen but i have only had one babysitter.

  2. Hi Dylan,
    Funny story! I liked the part at the beginning where you introduced the main character. It gave me all the details I needed without getting in the way of the story. I found the bit at the end where Jeffy put a tarantula in Bob’s bowl hilarious. Keep up the good work.
    Michael (Team 100wc), Warwick, UK

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