I heaved and puffed when I slammed and locked the door. I crumbled into a worthless heap. All I heard was the soft drip drop of the slime. The slime dripped through the floorboards overhead.
I stared up. Another pair of eyes met me. They were bulging and bulbous, raging and insane. CRASH! The person fell before me. I wasted no time.
I took hold of the pale man’s head and slammed it into the wall. The little cottage shook. Then I flung it over my shoulder as if I was a pro wrestler.
It screamed and ran at me. Taking out my crowbar, I swung it like a baseball bat. The thing flew away a meter and never got up again.
I fell to the ground and tried to sleep. But something wet landed on my cheek…
hi paul
this was a great story
it was violent but good
keep up the good work
your friend sean mc s
Hi Paul well done ,
This was great I loved it band why were you fighting?
This reminds me of a piece from lord if the rings where Frodo is attacked by Smeagol and nearly kills him but he tells him that he is noe the master of the ring and him.
Please comment on my story bit is called do hatters.
Your sincerely Julius sitting across from you.
Hi Paul,
I loved your story,
The adjectives that you used to describe the eyes were amazing,
I wonder what the wet thinh that landed on your cheek was,
Keep up the good work, – Kayden
Hello,
I absolutely love your story,
I wish I had those moves,
The title is just so catchy,
Well done for showcase.
By Aivaras
Yo Paul.
Amazing story.
Were you scared?
This reminds me of a video game called resident evil.
Amazing story though. Kyle?????
Hi Paul,
I really liked your story.
You were very good at using so many great words and adjectives.
Keep up the good work!
Congrats on the showcase its well deserved.
Dylan K
Hey Paul good story!
I don’t like bulls after reading that story.
Hi Paul amazing story
I loved how the slime was chasing you
Where did the slime come from?
I loved how you used the prompt
What happens when the slime hits you ?
Is their a way out of the cottage?
Great story congratulations on getting star writer
If you want you can comment on my story
Bye Shane F
Hi Paul,
I really liked your story.
You were very good at using so many great words and adjectives.
Keep up the good work!
Congrats on the showca
Congratulations Paul – Your story was showcased this week.
Super work!
Wow! Great story Paul. You’ve used some fantastic vocabulary and your descriptions are vivid. This is an excellent piece of writing and you should be very proud of your work.
Well done.
Ms Brennock
https://msbrennocksclass.100wc.net/
Well done Paul – another great thriller!
I loved the title.
What was it that landed on your cheek?
Hi Paul,
I was very impressed with your descriptive word choices this week, they were very carefully chosen. I particularly liked the description of the eyes staring down at you.
Miss T
Stockbridge
Paul, this is just fabulous. Brilliant imagination used and I love your use of alliteration (bulging and bulbous). You’ve created a very scary scene and described it very well. It all sounds very scary (and slimey). Well done.