I knew I shouldn’t have come the short way -after all, Mom had warned me not to but I was so desperate to be home in time watch my favourite TV programme.
My yellow bicycle creaked underneath me as I put pressure on the pedals. I looked behind me, the pitbulls were still up my tail.
A ditch lay ahead of me I knew it was my last hope. I dropped my yellow bicycle and scrambled over the ditch. I watched on as my bicycle was devoured greedily by the dogs. I walked away quietly just lucky to be alive.
My goodness Dan! What a scary experience. As I always say with things like that, things can be replaced but people can’t. I’m glad that you were OK. Well done and keep up the good work!
Hello my friend.
I really liked your story. I wonder why the dogs got after you, and the dogs must’ve been very hungry to eat a hole bike.
Leon.
Ms Brennock’s class.
Dan,
I think your story is very interesting. Especially when I saw the part about the Pitbulls on your tail, I was hooked! I like the way you described your story and the clear words you used.
Has this ever happened to you? How did you think to write about dogs?
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https://kidblog.org/class/7th-grade-english-19-20/posts/5j2rrhi1cri3rx2peopvp8dbx
Sincerely,
Grace