One day my friends and I went to the forest because people around town were saying that there was a weird creature there. We looked around and we saw a cottage. We decided we would go inside. Then suddenly it became dark and 2 out of the 5 of us were gone. Suddenly there was a massive dark looking creature looking down at us so we swiftly started running. Then the creature disappeared but then my other 2 friends were gone. Then I was back at the cottage. Then there was a man with a mask on his face. Then I felt myself going to sleep…
Well done Evan.
This sure was a midnight mystery. I’d love to know more.
Who was this mystery man with the mask? Was he somehow connected to the weird creature?
2 things to note – It’s My friends and I … and try not to overuse the word THEN.
Look for other alternatives – after that – next – soon – later on …
Keep up the good work.