Week 37 My Metal Detector By Kristupas

I woke up one morning and I said to myself I’m going to use my metal detector today. So I told my mom I was going, then I headed off.

At first, I searched and didn’t have any luck but suddenly I heard a beep. I ran back home and got my shovel and started to dig. I hit a big case. I was very excited as this was my first find. I picked it up and opened it.

Inside was an ancient gold viola. When I was about to go home I realised that I was lost. I tried to find my way home and I did but it was very dark when I got home.

4 thoughts on “Week 37 My Metal Detector By Kristupas”

  1. Hi Kristupas
    Well done getting all the word prompts into your 100WC in such a normal way. Your writing is quite natural and creative. Well done.
    Mrs P (Team 100WC)
    Wellington, New Zealand

  2. Dear Kris

    I love the part when you said “At first, I searched and didn’t have any luck but suddenly I heard a beep. I ran back home and got my shovel and started to dig.” I thought it was creative. I thought it was a good use of using the word viola in your story.

    Best wishes Lily

  3. Dear Kristupas
    Nice job
    I really liked how you said, ” I was very excited as this was my first find”.
    That’s a really good sentence
    Next time maybe you could try to use some different words or punctuation

    From
    Anika

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