Week 38 The Zoo Animals’ speech by Adam

One day I woke up and I was an animal in the zoo. The animals were calm and didn’t hurt each other. (Or so I thought …I didn’t know how wrong I was.)

One day they were all bickering about who was the better animal. Everything was calm … ’til the lion called everyone out and then the elephant delivered his speech… Everyone got scared and the elephant said he was the biggest and all others were small.

Suddenly the giraffe walked in and a huge riot broke out… But then I woke up and realised it was a dream. Phew, I said to myself.

5 thoughts on “Week 38 The Zoo Animals’ speech by Adam”

  1. Wow… that was an interesting dream. I can see this story going further too. Had you decided what animal was the protagonist (the lead character) who was dreaming or do you want your readers to decide for themselves? I was imagining something like a gerbil… or maybe bigger like a capybara.

  2. Adam, I think that as a year 5 you could begin to think of a more satisfying ending for your stories than ‘it was just a dream.’
    Instead, would you consider resolving the argument perhaps? Something like this …….
    Suddenly the giraffe walked in and a huge riot broke out. Little chimpanzee swung over and asked the animals what each of them thought BIG meant. The elephant thought BIG was HEAVY. Looking down from his great height, the giraffe said, “BIG is TALL.”
    Little chimp thought carefully about his own attributes. “Well I think I’m kind and have a BIG heart.” After a thoughtful discussion, the animals decided that we can all be big and make a BIG difference to others in our own way.
    What do you think?
    Jackie (Team 100WC)
    New Zealand

  3. Hi Adam
    What an interesting 100Wc you have written around the prompt. The zoo sounded terrifying so I am glad it was all a dream too. Well done.
    Mrs P (Team 100WC)
    Wellington, New Zealand

  4. Hello Adam, Nice work, I like your story reason being is you used the description well and i could visualize the story in my head. You used you prompt nicely and i wish to see more improvement on your writing when i visit again. Outstanding work From, Angus567mps.
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  5. What a great story! I really liked it and did not anticipate the end. Well done!

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