Week 6 The Chase by Dylan

I screamed, I tried not to but I couldn’t help myself.

I was walking downtown and I saw a group of animal like people crawling around in an alley.

They saw ( and possibly heard me ) and started crawling towards me at an amazing speed.

I dashed to the nearby park and hid behind the slide until I felt something breathing on my neck…

I threw my elbow back and heard a spine chilling screech.

I picked up a rock and threw it .

It was heavier than I expected but I managed it .

I was then cornered and they pounced.

2 thoughts on “Week 6 The Chase by Dylan”

  1. Hi Dylan,

    Wow! Really good story!
    Your structure really set the pace and built the tension up right up until the final sentence!

    Good job!
    Miss. L. Team100, Edinburgh, UK

  2. Hi Dylan,
    What a great story! I could hear your spine-chilling screech as I read!
    Keep up the good work.
    Mrs O Sullivan.

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