Dear Diary,
I was so excited to go on the Titanic. Even though I was in third class, I was still super excited. My family are very poor -they only had 10 pounds from their life savings to go on the Titanic. Suddenly there was a big crash on the Titanic. From the ginourmous crash the trap door had somehow locked. I was crying from fright as I was really scared. My mom and dad were giving me hugs to calm me down. After a while I found another door. I wondered what was behind the door. My hands were shaking but I pushed the door open. Our lives were saved – there in front of us were the life boats.
I enjoyed your story Marc – well done.
Your family was one of the lucky ones to survive this disaster.
Hello 🙂
Your story was really nice! I like how you used describing words and used the prompt!
Hey Marc
I love the titanic and as soon as I read the first sentence my body filled with excitement. I also thought it was very interesting the way it was a diary entry. I don’t see anything that you can improve on because in my opinion this story is already amazing just the way it is . Keep up the good work.
~ Holly (Ms Brennock)